O is for Origin by Jessica Khoury
When I post reviews, they are for books I like and gladly recommend to others. I am also including tips for writers based on what I read. Now here is my review of Origin by Jessica Khoury, a young adult Sci-Fi novel.
My Reader’s Review:
This story was a real journey. I enjoyed getting to know Pia, an immortal girl cut off from the rest of the world. She was an interesting character and the setting, the Amazon, was amazing. Jessica Khoury’s descriptions of the jungle and its natives were mystifying.
I love the story Pia tells to explain how she became immortal. It is so scientific, but also believable and that is a major plus for fiction. I found myself asking the same questions as Pia: What would it be like to live for all eternity? The questions and the mystery that are part of the story line lingered in my mind and I wanted to know the answers just as much as Pia.
The climax is thrilling and my heart was racing. Then at the peak of the story, my heart shuttered and broke. But that moment is oh so good!
That's me at a wedding, but I'm pretending it's Pia.
My Writer’s Review:
I couldn’t help but think the moment when Pia eats Skittles for the first time was sadly lacking with just “a burst of fruit”. When I recall what it’s like to eat Skittles, I imagine the crack of the shell when my teeth sink into the candy, the chewy heart, and the explosion of fruity flavors.
TIP: If you’re writing about a character experiencing something for the first time, imagine you’re that character. Then go above and beyond in your description to share that experience.
While I was reading, I noted an abundance of similes. These are great for enhancing your writing, but too many close together is too much.
TIP: Readers are smart and can understand what you are telling them, so cut out unnecessary similes.
I also spotted an overuse of specific words such as unwitting/unwittingly. In just one paragraph there were two uses, and several in a matter of pages.
TIP: Use words that standout only once or at least far apart from each other. A thesaurus can help you to find an alternative word.
My take on the Elysia flower.
But before you think my writer’s review influenced my overall view of the book, it didn’t. I gave Origin 4.5 stars! :)
QUESTION: Have you read Origin by Jessica Khoury? What did you think?
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